I had a visit from two Y3 boys. They showed me their writing. They’d been learning about Mary Anning. I was so impressed with the quality of their writing and their technique. Not only that, they confidently talked about writing upwards of six paragraphs over two or more pages. The standard was so high for their age. I told them that I would put their work on my blog and their faces lit up! I said that people from all over the world might look at it….
One of our Y5 pupils has been working after school on his writing. He’s had 1:1 tuition with Mrs Weet. Just the other day, he came to show me how his original piece of writing had been developed and improved. I was blown away! Here is the before and after. Well done Moustafa.
She finally swoops in and grabs that bag and climbed the tree and shook all of dreams. As soon as the last happy ending flew out it all went back to normal and Jack ran back home and slept.
Sneekily, Jack slunk towards the eerie, elderly, wicked witch. With a glare, Jack snatched the bag from the witche’s twig like hands. Jack scampered backwards like a badger as the witch lunged towards the bag full of dreams. As quick as a flash, Jack scaled the trunk of the tallest tree. Jack could’nt reach the branch. She stretched her hands upwards. She jumped. Her fingers clung onto the rough branch. She pulled her self up, her heart beating rapidly. While Jack pulled open the bag, the witch tried to catch up with Jack. As soon as Jack opened the bag, the happy endings flew out like birds.
The Y2 children recently showed me some wonderful persuasive writing. At first I wasn’t sure, but they absolutely convinced me to let them have a beach holiday!
The quality of their writing in their Topic Book was just as good as the quality of writing in their English Book.